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Wednesday, November 29, 2006
First breath
My first ever attempt at Haiku... and hopefully, not my last...
lilting notes ears that seek a breath...
Don't know if it qualifies as a Haiku, though...
5 comments:
Anonymous
said...
They say that haikus should have 17 syllables, dispersed as five in the first and last lines and seven in the middle line. But I was looking recently at a collection of haikus by Basho (1644 - 94), and noted that in the translation in Penguin classics this is not always the case. As in
Old pond leap-splash - a frog
For example. So it seems that yours qualifies very well.
Perhaps Basho's original follows the classic syllable pattern. Anyway, when writing haikus, I find that the discipline is helpful and that English being a largely uninflected language like Japanese (I believe) it does no harm at all.
Keep writing haikus, but I think you will find that it is not at all easy to do it well.
Thanks Plutarch! I'm a complete novice to haikus and had only read them before... stumbled across an article on the techniques on writing one, and thought I'd try... The articles fails to mention this rule of syllables, but I'll try to keep it in mind... Appreciate your help..
well not much i can "comment". But some new stuff for me. As of now the concept itself (little bit that i know) seems boring. I will try and discover more. I felt the same about Floyd initially.
Well Tanmoy, the beauty of Haikus lies in the conciseness of form... experts at haiku can express very very complicated and complex thoughts withing the allowed few words... and when you read a really good haiku, its like witnessing a flash of lightnenig - brilliant, powerful and breathtakingly beautiful...
5 comments:
They say that haikus should have 17 syllables, dispersed as five in the first and last lines and seven in the middle line. But I was looking recently at a collection of haikus by Basho (1644 - 94), and noted that in the translation in Penguin classics this is not always the case. As in
Old pond
leap-splash -
a frog
For example. So it seems that yours qualifies very well.
Perhaps Basho's original follows the classic syllable pattern. Anyway, when writing haikus, I find that the discipline is helpful and that English being a largely uninflected language like Japanese (I believe) it does no harm at all.
Keep writing haikus, but I think you will find that it is not at all easy to do it well.
Thanks Plutarch! I'm a complete novice to haikus and had only read them before... stumbled across an article on the techniques on writing one, and thought I'd try...
The articles fails to mention this rule of syllables, but I'll try to keep it in mind... Appreciate your help..
well not much i can "comment". But some new stuff for me. As of now the concept itself (little bit that i know) seems boring. I will try and discover more. I felt the same about Floyd initially.
Well Tanmoy, the beauty of Haikus lies in the conciseness of form... experts at haiku can express very very complicated and complex thoughts withing the allowed few words... and when you read a really good haiku, its like witnessing a flash of lightnenig - brilliant, powerful and breathtakingly beautiful...
nice :-)
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